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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meaks of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meaks of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate information about the average percentage of three types of nutrients:
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added sugar in typical meals, which may be harmful if consumed too much.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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sodium
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, saturated fat, and added sugar in
dinner
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 make up the largest total proportion,
while
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 the opposite is true for breakfast. It is
also
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 noticeable that
sodium
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 at
dinner
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 occupies the highest percentage, regardless of being unhealthy if consumed excessively. As
it
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apply
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can be seen,
dinner
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 contains the highest percentage of
sodium
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, with 43%,
while
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 breakfast and
snack
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snacks
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 share the same figure of 14%, 29% lower than
dinner
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. In terms of added sugar,
this
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 nutrient in snacks is the highest, with 42%,
whereas
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 breakfast contains the least, with just 16%.
Moreover
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, 37% is saturated fat in
dinner
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, which is the largest figure compared to
remaining
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the remaining
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 meals. Meanwhile, 26% and 21% are for lunch and snacks, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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