WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of 

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram contains two line graphs showing the
number
of shops in a country rounded to the nearest hundred, the solid line representing those that closed and the dotted line illustrating those that opened. The
number
of businesses that started in 2011 was at a high of 8500
while
the
number
that shut down was at around 6400.
While
the figures for closing businesses fluctuated more than
than
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that
of
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starting businesses, the largest disparity can be seen in 2015
where
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a record low of 500 enterprises ceased to operate and around eight times that quantity, 4000 enterprises, began their operations. The highest
number
of shop closures was over 7000 in 2013
while
the
number
of openings that year was 5000. Surprisingly, the two categories achieved a near
equilavent
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equivalent
figure in 2014 at 6200 closures and 6100 openings.
To conclude
, the
amount
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of firms that
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remained generally higher than that of firms that started over the eight years.
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