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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions. Several Nations have observed an enormous increase in crime amid youngsters

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growed
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 significantly the level
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 of
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teenegers
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teenagers
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national
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enormous
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 youngsters.
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essay will explain both views.
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teenegers
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teenagers
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 because they
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lack
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knowladge
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knowledge
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felony
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,
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burglary
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consumption
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motorcycle
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 the road. it is
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 right now. so that
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solution the
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government
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 they socialisation regarding the effect of the violation that
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funishment
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punishments
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.
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, the teenagers will
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 to do the lawbreaking.
in addition
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lack
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 of control
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parents
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affect
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teenegers
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teenagers
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misdeed
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misdeeds
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, so their
parents
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 need to control their children to overcome wrongdoing
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which
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delinquency
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.
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,
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young people
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lower
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doing
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the
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infraction
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infractions
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 since they have experienced life, but sometimes they
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the crime
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crime
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crimes
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 if they have
opportunity
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. so
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it is essential
educatation
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education
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crime
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where
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 jail and other.
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 a
crime
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criminination
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in
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of
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countries.
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,
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teenegers
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teenagers
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increased
doing
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criminalitation
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criminalisation
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compare
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compared
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 to
youngster
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most
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in most
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 countries because
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lack
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 of
knowladge
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knowledge
 and
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lack
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the lack
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 of control
their
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parents
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, so their
parents
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 and
goverment
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government
required
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are required
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 to overcome the issues.It is the best
rekomendation
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recommendation
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a
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crime
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socialisation
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understanding
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an understanding
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 what the punishment
if
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is if
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 they
will
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do a violent.

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coherence
Try to structure your introduction more clearly. State the problem first and outline the two main points you will discuss.
coherence
Work on the logical flow of your arguments. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and link smoothly to the next.
task achievement
Expand on your main points with more detailed explanations and examples. This will help to fully address the task.
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Take care to use correct and consistent verb tenses. Also, check for common spelling mistakes to make your writing clearer.
coherence
Include both an introduction and conclusion to clearly frame your essay. Sum up your main points at the end to leave a lasting impression.
supported points
Clarify and develop your ideas. Make sure each point is supported with clear reasoning and examples.
task achievement
You have identified the issue and attempted to discuss reasons and solutions, which is key to answering the task.
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Your essay reflects awareness of the broader social context, such as the role of knowledge and parental control in teenage crime.
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You provide some potential solutions to address the problem, which shows critical thinking.
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