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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions. Several Nations have observed an enormous increase in crime amid youngsters

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growed
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grown
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 significantly the level
violation
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of violation
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 of
teenegers
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teenagers
. other
nationa
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national
nations
 had observed an
anormous
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enormous
offense
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offence
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 youngsters.
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essay will explain both views.
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 the one hand, there are many
teenegers
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teenagers
 doing
a
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offense
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offence
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 because they
have
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lack
of
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knowladge
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knowledge
, so they will
do
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commit
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felony
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felonies
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,
such
 as
robber
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robbing
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,
burgler
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burglary
,
consumtion
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consumption
consuming
 drugs and
motorcaycle
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motorcycle
 racing
in
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on
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 the road. it is
increase
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increasing
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 right now. so that
the
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solution the
goverment
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government
need
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 to make some training to overcome the cases,
for
example
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 they socialisation regarding the effect of the violation that
have
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has
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funishment
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punishments
punishment
 like
prison
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a prison
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.
As a result
, the teenagers will
afraid
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be afraid
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 to do the lawbreaking.
in addition
lack
 of control
of
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parents
 will
effect
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affect
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teenegers
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teenagers
 doing
misdeed
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misdeeds
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, so their
parents
 need to control their children to overcome wrongdoing
tha
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which
 is the best solution before they
will do
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become
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delinquency
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delinquent
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.
On the other hand
,
youngers
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young people
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 have
lowers
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lower
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doing
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apply
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the
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apply
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infraction
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infractions
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 since they have experienced life, but sometimes they
do
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the crime
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crime
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crimes
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 if they have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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. so
that
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it is essential
educatation
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education
 what is the effect the
crime
where
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and where
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 they can get punishment,
for
example
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 jail and other.
Consequently
, they understand the danger
doing
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of doing
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 a
crime
,
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, it will
be declined
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criminination
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in
 most
of
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countries.
To sum up
,
teenegers
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teenagers
 have
increaseing
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increased
doing
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apply
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criminalitation
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criminalisation
criminalization
compare
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compared
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 to
youngster
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youngsters
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most
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in most
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 countries because
the
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lack
 of
knowladge
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knowledge
 and
lack
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the lack
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 of control
their
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of their
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parents
, so their
parents
 and
goverment
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government
required
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are required
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 to overcome the issues.It is the best
rekomendation
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recommendation
 to decrease
a
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apply
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crime
 giving
socialitation
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socialisation
socialization
 to give them
understanding
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an understanding
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 what the punishment
if
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is if
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 they
will
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apply
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do a violent.
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Your essay reflects awareness of the broader social context, such as the role of knowledge and parental control in teenage crime.
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