the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the average weekly expenses of families in an unspecified country
1968
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in 1968
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and 2018.
Overall
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, spending on housing , transport and leisure increased .Meanwhile, food ,fuel and power, clothing and footwear,
personal
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and personal
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goods decreased,
while
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household goods remained unchanged with no change. In 1968, average spending focused on food. It accounts for about 35% of income,
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however
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however,
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over five
decades
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decades,
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it has dropped sharply to half. Take turns spending for clothing and
footware
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footwear
reduced by halved by 10% to 5% and 8% to 4%. Fuel and power only
dections
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decreased
slightly from 7% to 4%. Leisure surpassed and accounted for the highest spending level after 50 years from 8% to 22%. Not least, spending on housing
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increased sharply from 10 to 18% and ranked second in income spending. Transport increased slightly from 8% to 14%. From 1968 to 2018 the household has not changed, still maintaining the spending level of 8% of total costs.
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it is interesting to observe the changes in quantity data on various areas of families spending their weekly income over the span of 50 years .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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