Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today's tourism industry.

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Tourism
today creates a variety of problems,
such
as
pollution
due to
flights
,
transport
and dirty
water
. Governments should impose extra taxes on
flights
or accommodation to restrict today’s
tourism
industry One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
tourism
creates a variety of problems,
such
as
pollution
due to
flights
,
transport
and dirty
water
.It is undeniable that
tourism
has become an essential part of our life.
However
,these days
at
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tourism
has more harm than good. Yes of course
tourism
is
important
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attribute of
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the country
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country
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economic
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.
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we have
tourism
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country
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,
such
as France,Spain,Italy
and
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etc. France is
most
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tourism
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country in
world
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. Must tourists want
view
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Eiffel
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Tower
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economies being 90 per cent of
tourism
compared with other countries
.
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But France is contaminated by
pollution
and tourists. Many tourists throw their trash on the
street
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of Paris. Another important aspect is the problem of
water
pollution
, which often arises
due to
insufficient control over waste and sewage disposal in areas with high tourist activity. To tackle
this
problem government should impose extra taxes on
flights
or
accommodation
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accommodations
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to restrict today’s
tourism
industry.
This
most
easiest
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and so the best way to stop
pollution
due to
flights
,
transport
and dirty
water
. People who don’t have much money
they’re
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not travelling with that solution. If people used ecological resources and technology
to
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tourism
, a variety of problems,
such
as
pollution
due to
flights
,
transport
and dirty
water
they
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would be few
fever
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coherence
Ensure that every paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting ideas are well-organized.
cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures and linking words to improve the flow of your essay.
task response
Provide more detailed specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
task response
The essay introduces a clear main topic and acknowledges the significance of tourism.
coherence
The problem of pollution caused by tourism is clearly stated.
task response
The essay offers a potential solution, suggesting extra taxes as a way to mitigate tourism's negative impacts.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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