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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
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table above shows how changed using different travel choices in England from 1985 to 2000. In
genaral
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general
, all modes increased but walking, local bus and bicycle using
avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
 travelled per person per
year
 decreased. First of all,
while
 walking
distance
 had been 255 in 1985, it had fell to 237.
Bicycle
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also
decreas
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decrease
decreased
 between 1985 and 2000. Car was
mode
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a mode
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which
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the most used
of
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travel option and car
using
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 grew a lot
of
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. Local bus
distance
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miles
 reduced from 429 to 274
year
 by
year
.
Long
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distance
bus
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buses
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 increased more than double between 1985 and 2000. Train’s
avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
 travelled per person per
year
inreased
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increased
77
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. Taxi which was the least
using
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 mode increased more than almost triple. Other options
aslo
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also
 climbed 450 to 585. All modes’
distance
 in
miles
 travelled per person per
year
 1735 between 1985 and 2000.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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