The tables below give information about sales of Fairtade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summsrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

Summsrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The tables illustrate the sales of Fairtade-labelled
coffoe
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coffees
and bananas from 1999 to 29994 in the
UK
,
Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium,
Sweden
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and Sweden
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.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that in 1999,
While
Switzerland
had the
most
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highest
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rate both in bananas and
coffees
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coffee
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, the
UK
experienced a rapid increase, and became the first one in the consumption of coffee in 2004. It is interesting to note that, in the coffee proportions, the
UK
skyrocketed from 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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euros to 20
millions
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million
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in 2004.
Switzerland
had doubled its sales by 3
millions
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million
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.
Moreover
, Denmark and Sweden saw the same advancement, which was an increase
around
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0.2.
Finally
, Belgium experienced a rapid growth of 0.7 for 5 years.
On the other hand
, in the bananas' income,
Switzerland
rose from 15 to 47
millions
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million
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of
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euros between 1999 and 2004.
While
the
UK
and Belgium witnessed a sharp jump throughout the period, Sweden and Denmark had been showing a downward trend, and they dropped almost 1
millions
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million
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euros during a period of 5 years.
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