Shoppers have too much choice, from chocolate bars to jeans.' What, in your opinion, are the advantages and disadvantages of having many things to choose from?
In 2024, there
is
an abundance number of every product. There are shelves and shelves of different Wrong verb form
will be
type
of milk to Fix the agreement mistake
types
choice
from, from Replace the word
choose
full fat
to almond milk. Add a hyphen
full-fat
Overall
, there are he
advantages and disadvantages of having Correct pronoun usage
apply
choice
due Correct article usage
a choice
the
financial ability to purchase needs and wants.
In terms of advantages, having multiple choices of any product adheres to those with special needs. Change preposition
to the
For instance
, those who are not able to digest milk, are now able to purchase and consume alternative type
of dairy. Fix the agreement mistake
types
In addition
to that, prices are more affordable due to
competitions
between companies. Fix the agreement mistake
competition
Finally
, people of different weight
are now able to purchase clothes Fix the agreement mistake
weights
to
their sizes since companies are creating Change preposition
of
products
that
is
suitable for everyone.
There are equally if not more disadvantages Change the verb form
are
of
consumerism. It causes issues Change preposition
to
that
is
Change the verb form
are
effecting
more than people. The environment is severely affected by the amount of Correct your spelling
affecting
products
thrown due to
having an abundance of items. Furthermore
, it is the driving force behind materialism where people measure others based on what bag they are carrying over their values. In line with that, due to
creating newer products
, companies created more labels such
as "plus size" or shops that only adheres
to ladies who wear size 0. Those labels are affecting women negatively. Creating Correct subject-verb agreement
adhere
unnecessarily
categories of Change the word
unnecessary
products
to expand the market leads to women questioning if they need to fit this
new category.
In conclusion, the disadvantages outweighs
the advantages by large. Having the privilege to shop should not be held of importance over the environment. Rules and regulations should be put in place to ensure that Change the verb form
outweigh
products
that
is
harmful are not made.Change the verb form
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introduction conclusion
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logical structure
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relevant specific examples
Clarify some of the main points with more specific examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments. For instance, elaborate on how companies creating more sizes impact different communities.
complete response
The essay covers both advantages and disadvantages of having an abundance of choices in products, which shows a balanced discussion.
supported main points
Main points are well-supported with relevant ideas, such as the impact on people with special needs and the environmental consequences of overconsumption.
logical structure
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs detailing advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion summarizing the viewpoints.
Your opinion
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