You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Hi Sara, How have you been? I have come to the UK
for studying
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to study
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chemistry at White College since
Semptember
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September
. I need your help to find a part-time job
while
I am studying. My study major includes practical and technical subjects. Our practical courses need special facilities for laboratories which
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provided on Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday from 13-17.
In addition
, our technical course is held on a daily basis except
weekends
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at weekends
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. To rectify
this
situation, I need
part-time
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a part-time
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job to get to know about
culture
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the culture
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and the way of life in
this
country.
Then
, I think it helps me become familiar with new people and improve my communication
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apply
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here. From an economic perspective, I find
this
as an opportunity to gain money in order to solve some financial problems.
Finally
, I’d suggest making a link if you
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any people who
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searching
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for an
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amateur part-time workforce in their business. Thanks a million in advance. I am looking for receiving your response. Best wishes, Ma
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logical structure
To improve logical structure, be more explicit in linking your points and consider using transitional phrases. For example, 'Furthermore' and 'In addition' can help guide the reader through your argument.
single idea per paragraph
In one section of the letter, multiple ideas are packed into just one sentence. Breaking this down into separate sentences or paragraphs will make the letter easier to read and understand.
complete response
The letter successfully completes the task requirements by detailing study plans, explaining why a job is needed, and suggesting how the friend can help.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is appropriate and friendly, making it suitable for a personal letter to a friend.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are effective, making the letter feel complete and polished.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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