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Although methane has a higher GWP, carbon dioxide is still the worse greenhouse gas in the world

#methane #gwp #carbon #dioxide #greenhouse #gas #world
I agree with that statement is
carbon
dioxide
 is still the
worse
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greenhouse
 gas in the world. Because
carbon
dioxide
 accounts for about 80% of human-crated
greenhouse
 gas
emissions
. With
develop
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the development
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 of industry right now, The
carbon
dioxide
emissions
 to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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is
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are
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 very much. Nowadays,
in
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the world the
carbon
dioxide
 level in the atmosphere is more than 400 parts per million, it’s very high
in
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for
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hundred
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hundreds
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 of
thousand
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thousands
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 of years.
carbon
dioxide
need
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 about one thousand years
for decomposed
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to decompose
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.
Carbon
dioxide
emissions
 every day by daily activities of
human
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humans
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.
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 in Viet Nam,
main
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the main
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 vehicles
in
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on
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road
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the road
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 is
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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,
carbon
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and carbon
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dioxide
emissions
is
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are
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 very high by them.
Or the
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The
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carbon
dioxide
emissions
 by the factories activity ,
this
 is main reason
make
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increasing
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greenhouse
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in greenhouse
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.
Although
 methane is
most
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the most
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 powerful
greenhouse
 gas
but
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apply
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with
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the
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a
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 short
life time
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lifetime
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 in
environment
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the environment
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. I think
carbon
dioxide
still
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is still
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main
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the main
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 reason make increase the
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greenhouse
greengouse
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in greengouse
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coherence cohesion
Work on enhancing the introduction and conclusion for a more cohesive essay. A clear introduction and a summarizing conclusion are important for cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your main points are well-supported with logical arguments and relevant examples. This will help in maintaining clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Although you cover the main points, try to elaborate more on each point with detailed explanations and examples. This will help achieve a complete response.
task achievement
Avoid using colloquial language and ensure that the essay maintains a formal tone throughout. For instance, phrases like 'very much' can be replaced with 'a significant amount'.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to convey your ideas in a clearer manner. For example, refine sentences like 'With develop of industry right now...' to 'With the ongoing development of industry...'
task achievement
Your essay provides a clear stance on the issue and includes relevant examples to support your argument, such as the mention of motorcycle emissions in Vietnam.
coherence cohesion
You effectively acknowledge the potency of methane as a greenhouse gas while emphasizing the significance of carbon dioxide due to its prevalence and longevity, which shows a nuanced understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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