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The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the average
percentage
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 of 10 different
household
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 spending patterns, housing, food, eating out, transport, entertainment, utilities, clothing, health, education and retirement savings. These categories were separated into 3 subcategories, proportionally
household
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income
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, which are low,
medium
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 and high
income
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.
Firstly
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, we can observe that housing had the highest
percentage
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 of both low
income
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, which is from $15,000 to $25,000, and
medium
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income
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, which is from $50,000 to $75,000, at 28% approximately.
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, education and retirement savings had the lowest
percentage
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 of low
income
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 at approximately 3%,
while
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 education had
also
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 the lowest
percentage
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 of
medium
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household
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income
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 at almost 4%.
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, housing
also
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of high
household
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income
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 at 27%. In the end, eating out had the lowest
percentage
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 of high
income
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 at almost 5%.
Overall
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, we can see that housing and transport were the two first categories of low and
medium
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income
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while
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 retirement savings was the first for high
income
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, household, income, medium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • income category
  • household spending
  • low-income households
  • mid-income households
  • high-income households
  • spending pattern
  • expenditure
  • trend
  • notably
  • significantly
  • on average
  • predominantly
  • essential expenses
  • disposable income
  • allocate
  • budget
  • vary
  • contrast
  • percentage
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