The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population

in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The following graph depicts the changes
of
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the population in various Asian
countriesbetween
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countries between
1970 and 2020,
then
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also
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and
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gives predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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, the percentage of people living in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand,
Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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experienced a dramatic climb from 1970 to 2020. As we can see in the graph, the population might continue to rise in the next 20
years
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. In 1970, the percentage of the citizens/ in
Philippines
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was the highest among the other three countries with over 30% and ,
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followed
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by a
slightly
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rise in the next year. Sequently (, it increased sharply in 1990.
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, there was a
mildly
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drop from 1990 to 2010
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followed by a gentle climb in 2020. And
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trend may
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consistently to over 50% in the next 20
years
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, Malaysia started with almost the same population(30%)and ended with the highest
populations
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population
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among the other three countries.
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trend increased slowly to over half of 40% between 1970 and 1990 and climbed
signifenctly
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significantly
to more than 70% in the next 30
years
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this
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graph
predict
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that it will
be rising
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stably to over 80% in the future. The percentage of
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citizens in Indonesia was the lowest in 1970 and it kept increasing to over 50% after 50
years
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and
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trend will
continues
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to jump to more than 60% in 2040.Thailand started with just below 20%
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followed by a
mildly increased
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in 1990 and remained
consistently
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in the next year. In 2020,
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proportion
negllgiblely
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negatively
climbed to just over 30% and it may have a
rapidly grow
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between 2020 to 2040.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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