El Niño is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Niño conditions.

El Niño is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Niño conditions.
The diagrams show the different
conditions
of the Pacific Ocean between normal
conditions
and El
nino
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conditions
.
Overall
, the water of the Pacific Ocean in normal
conditions
was cooler than in El Nino
conditions
. In normal
conditions
, it rained a lot with more precipitation in Australia.
This
rainfall led to increasing the nutrients and cooling water conducive in Peru.
In addition
, the
winds
from the west side were weak and those of the east were strong.
One
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the other hand
while
the the
winds
were pushing westwards, in Nino
conditions
they were conducted on the opposite side.
Furthermore
, In Australia, The dry temperature killed the plants and delayed the growth of fish in Peru. The water in these
conditions
has become warmer than in normal
conditions
.
Winds
also
interchanged their effects because
in
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the standards state,
winds
are strong on the west side and weak on the east which is the contrast in El
Ninoo
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situation.
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