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El Niño is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Niño conditions.

El Niño is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Niño conditions.
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The diagrams show the different
conditions
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 of the Pacific Ocean between normal
conditions
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 and El
nino
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Nino
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conditions
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.
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, the water of the Pacific Ocean in normal
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 was cooler than in El Nino
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. In normal
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, it rained a lot with more precipitation in Australia.
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 rainfall led to increasing the nutrients and cooling water conducive in Peru.
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, the
winds
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 from the west side were weak and those of the east were strong.
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 the other hand
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 the the
winds
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 were pushing westwards, in Nino
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 they were conducted on the opposite side.
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, In Australia, The dry temperature killed the plants and delayed the growth of fish in Peru. The water in these
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 has become warmer than in normal
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.
Winds
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also
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 interchanged their effects because
in
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 the standards state,
winds
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 are strong on the west side and weak on the east which is the contrast in El
Ninoo
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 situation.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words conditions, winds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade winds
  • upwelling
  • nutrient-rich
  • marine life
  • fisheries
  • thunderstorms
  • weather patterns
  • suppress
  • coral bleaching
  • livelihoods
  • natural disasters
  • emergency response systems
  • economic stability
  • biodiversity
  • crop yields
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