El Niño is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Niño conditions.
The diagrams show the different
conditions
of the Pacific Ocean between normal conditions
and El nino
Change the capitalization
Nino
conditions
.
Overall
, the water of the Pacific Ocean in normal conditions
was cooler than in El Nino conditions
.
In normal conditions
, it rained a lot with more precipitation in Australia. This
rainfall led to increasing the nutrients and cooling water conducive in Peru. In addition
, the winds
from the west side were weak and those of the east were strong.
One
the other hand Correct your spelling
On
while
the the winds
were pushing westwards, in Nino conditions
they were conducted on the opposite side. Furthermore
, In Australia, The dry temperature killed the plants and delayed the growth of fish in Peru. The water in these conditions
has become warmer than in normal conditions
. Winds
also
interchanged their effects because in
the standards state, Add the comma(s)
, in
winds
are strong on the west side and weak on the east which is the contrast in El Ninoo
situation.Change noun form
Ninoo's
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