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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the
production
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 levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, all
rates
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 decreased except for the
rate
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 of coal.
Moreover
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, the
production
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level
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 of
petroleum
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 was always the highest. Moving to a detailed analysis, the
production
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level
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 of
petroleum
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 ranked first (90
energy
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units
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)
while
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 the
rate
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 of coal
production
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 was 80
energy
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units
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 in 1981. Over the next 5
years
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, the
rate
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 of
petroleum
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production
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 increased significantly by 50
energy
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units
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.
However
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, the
rate
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 of coal fluctuated and declined to 60
energy
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units
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. After 10
years
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, the
rates
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 of
petroleum
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 fluctuated
while
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 the coal
rates
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 decreased slightly by 20
energy
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units
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. From 1996 to the end of the
period
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, the
rates
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 of
petroleum
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production
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 almost remained stable at 140
energy
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units
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,
whereas
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 the
rate
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 of coal again declined and finished the
period
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 at 35
energy
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units
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. In terms of natural gas, the
rate
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 of
production
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 was 40
energy
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units
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 at the beginning of the
period
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. Over the next 10
years
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, the
rates
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 remained stable at the initial
level
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 before climbing to 80
energy
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units
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 in 1996. After 5
years
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, the
production
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level
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 increased steadily and finished the
period
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 at 100
energy
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units
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, rates, rate, level, petroleum, energy, units, years, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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