The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
The bar chart illustrates a comparison between married women and married
men
in the average
hours
of unpaid
work
each week.
Overall
, it can be seen that the maximum
unpaid
Correct quantifier usage
number of unpaid
show examples
work
hours
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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done for married
men
. There is a significant difference between males and females in all given categories. The average
hours
that
men
without any child
work
without
paid
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pay
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was 30
hours
.
Moreover
, it rose to just over 50
hours
if they had one or two kids .
Men
with more than three children
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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work
60
hours
without money.
On the other hand
, we can notice from the chart that there is no huge difference in
women
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women's
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data .
In addition
, there is a slight decline in unpaid time
depend
Wrong verb form
depending
show examples
on the number of kids .
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