the graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000

the graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000
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The bar charts display the percentage of individuals aged 60-64 who remained in the
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force, categorized by gender, in the years 1970 and 2000. From an
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perspective, it's clear that the number of senior employees decreased over time across all countries, with a sharper decline observed among
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compared to men.
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Belgium
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experienced the most significant reduction in the percentage of elderly workers for both genders. In 1970, 795 of
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men
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aged 60-64 in
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and 76% in
Japan
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were employed, slightly lower than the
USA
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(86%) and
Indonesia
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(84%). Thirty years later, these figures dropped by 8 to 13% in the
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,
Japan
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and
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,
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Belgium
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saw a significant decrease of 27% in the
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proportion
of working males. For women aged 60-64, the employment rates varied more widely among the four nations
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compared
to men . In 1970, the
USA
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had the highest percentage of working women at 78%, followed by
Indonesia
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(65%),
Belgium
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(63%), and
Japan
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at 56%. By 2000, the figures had notably decreased to around 45 to 50% in the
USA
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,
Japan
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, and
Indonesia
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whereas
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Belgium
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experienced a minimal decline of 8%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words belgium, japan, usa, indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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