Topic: The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

Topic: The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
The given diagrams illustrate the proportion of men and female aged 60-64 remaining in the workforce from four different nations between 1970 and 2000. The rate of men between the ages of 60 to 64 who still
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higher than
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in the same age bracket in both years.
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in employment among every percentage of male and female workers in the age group of 60-64. In terms of figures for men in their early or mid-60s continuing to work, in 1970 those in Japan held the highest percentage at a notable 85%, followed by those in Belgium, Australia and the US. with 79%, 76%, 73% respectively. The most notable decline was witnessed by male workers aged 60-64 across the frame at 19% in 2000.
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, similar movements but with different magnitudes can be observed in the pictures of America and Japan. and Australia, which fell slightly to 55%, 74% and 47% during the same period. Turning to retention of information from the chart, the proportion of middle-aged
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aged 60-64 who are still working
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others have left Japan is highest at 18% in Belgium and significantly lowest was 8% in 1970. Meanwhile, the proportion of
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still participating in the
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force in both the US and Australia has shown contradictory changes with the figures showing signs of gradually increasing from 36% to 39% and 16% to 18% during the same period in 2000.
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