The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-62 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Two
bar Use synonyms
chart
Fix the agreement mistake
charts
provides
information about the genders Correct subject-verb agreement
provide
have
aged from 60 to 64 who were farmed in four countries Unnecessary verb
apply
during
1970 and 2000. The chart Change preposition
between
shown
number of Wrong verb form
shows
percentage
.
Use synonyms
Overall
, the Linking Words
percentage
of genders aged 60-64 in employment Use synonyms
highest
Add a missing verb
was highest
Change preposition
in
at
Japan in 2000 Change preposition
in
while
men and women Linking Words
lowest
Add a missing verb
were lowest
Correct pronoun usage
apply
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Change preposition
in
at
Change preposition
in
Belgium
in 1970. Use synonyms
Additionally
, Linking Words
men’s
Change preposition
in men’s
Belgium
the spreads are quite high between 1970 and 2000.
Beginning with during 1970 and 2000 the Use synonyms
percentage
of women who were employed Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
in
Belgium
Use synonyms
about
7% and 8%. Next Add a missing verb
was about
to
in Change preposition
apply
USA
the Correct article usage
the USA
percentage
of Use synonyms
two
years Use synonyms
higher
than Add a missing verb
is higher
at
Change preposition
in
Belgium
about 31% in 1970 and 28% in 2000. Moving Use synonyms
on
Japan and Australia in 1970 the Change preposition
to
percentage
of women employed Use synonyms
about
40 and 18% Add a missing verb
was about
while
in 2000 Linking Words
had
43 and 16%.
Moving on the Verb problem
it was
percentage
of men who farmed Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
in
Belgium
in 1970 Use synonyms
had
about 19% but in 2000 that higher in 1970 about 60%, Verb problem
was
this
had the spreads are quite high for Linking Words
two
years. In Use synonyms
USA
and Japan Correct article usage
the USA
had
the Unnecessary verb
apply
percentage
employed in Use synonyms
two
years Use synonyms
about
55% and 74% in 1970, 73% and 86% in 2000. Add a missing verb
was about
Finally
, In Australia Linking Words
had
men farmed at there about 76% in 2000 and 47% in 1970.Unnecessary verb
apply
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, percentage, belgium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 8 times.
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