Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motoways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A debatable discussion point is whether some people argue that it is very essential to invest
money
on
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in
roads
and motorways than
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rather than
on
public transportation systems instance railroads and Change preposition
in
tram
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trams
car
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This
essay disagrees with this
viewpoint and will now set out of
examples of the advantages of investing Change preposition
apply
on
public Change preposition
in
transport
to support that reasoning.
Firstly
, public transport
is a green system in their life. It helps to reduce carbon emissions which is not good for their healthy
. Replace the word
health
Besides
, it provides alternative sources of energy that are renewable such
as solar power, electrical
energy and do not pollute the air. Correct word choice
and electrical
For example
, carbon dioxide is produced by vehicle exhaust fumes and by burning fossil fuels causing polluted
environment.
Another point to consider is that Correct article usage
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invest
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investing
money
on
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in
roads
and motorways is one step forward to modernize
the city. Wrong verb form
modernising
Roads
and motorways will be expanded. It avoids long distance
travel. It will Add a hyphen
long-distance
also
be a smart choice because of reduction
of traffic congestion. Correct article usage
the reduction
For instance
, the reduction of traffic tram
will help people go to work or go to school punctual to avoid Fix the agreement mistake
trams
complaint
from something else.
In conclusion, public Fix the agreement mistake
complaints
transport
is the
green system and provides lots of Correct article usage
a
the
benefits in our Correct article usage
apply
life
. It has Fix the agreement mistake
lives
positive
impact on Add an article
a positive
environment
. Add an article
the environment
Thus
, this
essay has shown that spend
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spending
money
on public transport
is important
for our life rather than Correct quantifier usage
more important
spend
Wrong verb form
spending
money
on roads
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coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a clearer logical structure. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence, and the ideas within the paragraph should logically follow from one another.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction should clearly state what the essay will discuss. While you have indicated your disagreement, the phrasing is somewhat awkward. Consider rephrasing for clarity.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments more persuasive and show a deeper level of understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Make sure your points are fully developed. For instance, when discussing the environmental benefits of public transport, expand on how renewable energy sources contribute to reducing pollution.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, showing an awareness of the complexity of the issue.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your argument and restates your position.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?