The graph below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate the percentage of senior demographics from 60-64 who were still members of the labour force, classified by
genders
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, in 1970 and 2000. Looking at the graph from a general perspective, it is readily apparent that regardless of
countries
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, there were fewer and fewer senior employees over
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time with women witnessing a more drastic downturn than men.
Also
,
Belgium
recorded the most rapid decline in the percentage of working old people regarding both genders. In 1970, 79% and 76% of men aged 60-64 were employed in
Belgium
and
Japan
in turn, a bit lower than those of the
USA
(86%) and
Indonesia
(84%). 30 years later, these figures declined by 8 to 13% in three countries namely the
USA
,
Japan
and
Indonesia
whilst a substantial drop of 27% was seen in the proportion of working males in
Belgium
. Meanwhile, there was a wider discrepancy among employed women aged 60-64 in four nations compared to men. In 1970, the
USA
headed the list with 78% working females. Next came
Indonesia
(65%),
Belgium
(63%), and
last
position was
Japan
with only 56%. In 2000, there were remarkable falls to around 45 to 50% in the figures for
USA
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,
Japan
and
Indonesia
, approximately six times higher than that of
Belgium
, representing a negligible 8%.
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