Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorwayys than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, many have argued that
spend
Wrong verb form
spending
money
on motorways and streets are
more vital than expenditures on social transportation Correct subject-verb agreement
is
systems
like tram
and railways. The opinion of Fix the agreement mistake
trams
this
writer that
spending on public Add a missing verb
is that
transport
systems
is better than use
more for Wrong verb form
using
roads
and motorways.
First of all, public transport
systems
are a type of green transportations
. Green Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
transportations
Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
used
to cut down on emissions Add a missing verb
is used
in to
the atmosphere Join the words
into
due to
everyone use
trains or trams will less Wrong verb form
using
carbondioxide
than Correct your spelling
carbon dioxide
use
motors and Wrong verb form
using
car
, each of people each of motor so it will increase exhaust. Fix the agreement mistake
cars
Beside
that, public Replace the word
Besides
transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
are
cheaper than common Correct subject-verb agreement
is
vehicle
, cars and motors Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
use
fossil energy to work but the orther
Correct your spelling
others
use
natural energy to work, traffic jam
and traffic Fix the agreement mistake
jams
acidents
will not Correct your spelling
accidents
action
too much. So Verb problem
cause
spend
Wrong verb form
spending
money
to improve public transport
systems
are
necessary for a developing country.
Another salient point is that Correct subject-verb agreement
is
spend
Wrong verb form
spending
money
on roads
an
Correct your spelling
and
motorway
are more Fix the agreement mistake
motorways
importance
Replace the word
important
than
because Change preposition
apply
nowaday
,some Correct your spelling
nowadays
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
use
roads
and motorways too much, they thinks
it Change the verb form
think
more
Add a missing verb
is more
convinient
and they can reach Correct your spelling
convenient
to
the final destination they Change preposition
apply
wants
, but Change the verb form
want
the
public transportation Correct article usage
apply
have
to stop at the station and it take lots time to reach to right place. Change the verb form
has
For example
, in Viet Nam,there are too much
streets, Change the quantifier
many
a
part is the Vietnamese Correct article usage
apply
use
cars and motors, and onother
is they can not develop Correct your spelling
another
the
public Correct article usage
apply
transport
systems
due to
polluted
in Replace the word
pollution
this
country is rising quickly. This
poin
may be true but in the near future, Correct your spelling
point
pain
protech
Correct your spelling
protecting
environment
is a developing trend and all of the residents Correct article usage
the environment
wll
change to Correct your spelling
will
use
the public systems
more.
to
Change preposition
In
coclusion
, there are more advantages than when they spend Correct your spelling
conclusion
money
on roads
. Using green systems
is a
action to protect Change the article
an
Correct article usage
the environmant
environmant
, even Correct your spelling
environment
that
countries Correct word choice
if
wll bw
developed.Correct your spelling
will be
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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task achievement
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task achievement
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The essay includes relevant points about the environmental benefits of public transport systems and the need for investment in them.
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Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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