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the graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feartures and make comparisons where relevant.

the graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feartures and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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two graphs give
total
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the summarizes
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 by choosing and reporting
of aged
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ages
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 from 60 to 64 in four nations between 1970 and 2000
Overall
, employment facts for
men
 were generally higher than the
women
 in
this
 graph with Japan leading
list
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the list
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.
Additionally
, there was a decline in employment among
men
 and
women
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this
 age
for
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in
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 four countries the start
in
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of
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 1970 in two graphs, the figures for the
men
 and
women
 in
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Japan
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 a peak of
list
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the list
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 with from 40% to 70%, Followed by
USA
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the USA
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 stayed from 38% to 55% and got a second position. In the
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 was
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Australia over
period
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 of 29%, starting
18
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%.
In addition
, that of Belgium bottomed at
list
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 with 7% to 19%. Moving to the next years in 2000, the percentage of
men
 and
women
 in Japan
also
 peaked at
list
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 at 43% to 86%,
however
, the second place is converted by that of Belgium with 8% to 79%.
Moreover
, the figures for the
men
 and
women
 in Australia overcame that of
USA
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the USA
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while
 the proportion of
USA
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the USA
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 bottomed at four countries with 36% to 76%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, list with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rate
  • percentage
  • age group
  • gender gap
  • significant increase/decrease
  • compare
  • trend
  • highlight
  • potential reasons
  • narrowed/widened
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