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The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.
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Contained in the
two
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 given maps is information relating
changes
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of
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 the
office
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 building. Generally speaking, it is predicted that alters will occur to decrease
office
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room
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 and repurpose
grass
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area
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.
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IN
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 addition, the whole
room
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 is going to be extended. Beginning with the entrance and to the bottom right side, the main door is going to
be replaces
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in
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to
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 the middle and more extended
while
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 the older location is going to be the
office
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room
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.
Besides
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 that, the
grass
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area
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 will be demolished and reused as the meeting
area
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 with the extra
two
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 chairs. Turning
o
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to
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 the top right corner, where
WCs
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the WCs
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area
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 is planned to change to the corner of the
room
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while
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 adding
new
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a new
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 coffee machine near the toilets. Adjoining the WCs, the storeroom
is remained
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remains
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. Moving to the rest information, starting with the canteen and kitchen nowadays but changing to
two
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 offices in the future. The
grass
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place
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placed
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in
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on
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 the
left hand
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left-hand
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 side will be changed to the outdoor seating
area
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 with
additional
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an additional
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 three chairs in the bottom left corner, during that time,
two
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 offices between the entrance and the
grass
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area
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 are going to
combined
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be combined
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to
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into
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 the bigger
office
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, office, room, grass, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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