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The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its futher redevelopment

The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its futher redevelopment
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The given floorplans contain information pertaining layout of an
office
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 building at present and in the future after redevelopment.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the storeroom will be unchanged.
Additionally
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, the spaces of
glasses
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 will be cleared and replaced by
the
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apply
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public amenities. Beginning with the northern part of the building, the kitchen and the canteen will be replaced by
two
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office
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 rooms,
where as
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whereas
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 in the southern part, four
office
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 rooms
reuse
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reused
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 in sized
two
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office
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 rooms and will be extended. Moving on to the
two
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 areas of
glasses
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 which will be replaced by other public amenities. The right area of
glasses
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 will be replaced by the outdoor seating areas and three chairs,
where as
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whereas
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 the left area of
glasses
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 will be replaced by the meeting area that
have
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has
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 a coffee machine,
two
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 chairs and a restroom.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, glasses, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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