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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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table illustrates the
employment
rates
 of temporary migrant workers in four nations, namely Australia, New
Zealand
, the United
Kingdom
, and the United
States
 in 2003 and 2006. Units were measured in the form of numbers.
Also
, the
rates
 per 1,000 people were given in the
year
of
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2006.
Overall
, what stands out the most from the graph is that the United
States
 had the highest number of employees
while
 New
Zealand
 had the least over the given period. The most significant difference was found in the United
Kingdom
, the number of
employment
rates
 in 2006 increased almost double from 2003. In terms of
year
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 2003, the United
States
 ranked first in temporary migrant
employment
rates
 at 577,000, followed by Australia, and the United
Kingdom
, having 152,000, and 137,000 respectively. The most marginal number was found in New
Zealand
 at 65,000 in the same given
year
. With regards to the
year
 2006, the
employment
rates
 had increased in all given nations, the numbers per 1,000 people
rates
 show New
Zealand
 had the highest
rates
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at 21.1, followed by Australia, the United
Kingdom
 having 10.7, 4.4, and the United
States
 had the most marginal
rates
 being at 2.3.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, rates, zealand, kingdom, states, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginal" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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