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The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000.

The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000.
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The bar chart demonstrated the total mileage of five vehicles in the UK in a decade. The units are shown in billions.
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, there was an increase in
distance
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 travelled over the period examined.
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, among the six types of vehicles, buses and trains were more popular. In 1990, the
distance
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 that buses came through was about 40
billion
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kilometres
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,
while
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 trains were 35
billion
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kilometres
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. In 2000, the
distance
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 covered by both from of transport rose to more than 3
billion
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kilometres
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 for each. Turning back to the remaining statistics, in 1990, motorbikes had the highest
distance
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 which was about 4
billion
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kilometres
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,
while
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 bicycle was the vehicle that had the lowest
distance
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 which was 3
billion
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kilometres
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.
Moreover
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, the air was the type of transport that had the lowest value of the
distance
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 which illustrated 1
billion
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kilometres
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. After ten years, motorbikes and bicycles experienced a decline in levels of usage, with figures dropping by 1
billion
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kilometres
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 for each,
whereas
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 the figure for air travel increased strongly by 3
billion
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kilometres
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, billion, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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