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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#plans #show #layout #university #sports #centre #redevelopment #summarise #information #features #comparisons
Did diagrams
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the infrastructure of
university's
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the university's
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 sports facility of present and its plan
in
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for
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 future after
remake
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the remake
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.
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?
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Overall
,
It is clear that
 the facility now has three individual sections, two outdoor courts and
main
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a main
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 hall and after
returbishment
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refurbishment
, it will be connected to each other and become a whole.
Firstly
, additional 25 m pool,
there
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and there
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 will be leisure pools on its west side where outdoor courts used to be.
Then
on
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in
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 the spare place
that is
 left under it
changing
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a changing
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 room will be built.
Secondly
,
this
 reception area
is
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will be
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 expanded to
its
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apply
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both sides, and on these sides,
cafe
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a cafe
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 and sports shop will be installed.
Subsequently
,
instead
 of the outdoor courts
that
is
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are
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 on the east of the pool sports hall
to
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apply
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dance studios and changing
room
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rooms
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 will be constructed.
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You managed to include comparisons between the current and future layout, which is important.
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You provided relevant details about the changes in the sports centre.

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