The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The pie chart provides information about the products for retail fields in Newzaland between 2003 and 2013 .It is clear from the graph that travel
sales
had the largest part of the chart compared to other sectors during a specific period. While
the film trade covered the highest percentage in 2013. According to
what is shown, the ratio of sales
in travel fields was at 36% which later saw a sharp decline to 29% in 2013. On the other hand
, the rate of sales
in film and music products was 21% then
dramatically increased to 33% by 2013. However
, the proportion of clothes sales
was 24 % whereas
in 2013 fallen to 16% .In 2003 the figure shows the amount of book sales
witnessed 19% and rose to 22% in 2013. To sum up
we could say that the figure illustrates film and travel had the highest sales
in comparison with the other four fieldsSubmitted by aldossaryfaten95 on
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