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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year Plan your answer

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year Plan your answer
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The given
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infographic
infographics
 is information pertaining to the rate of illiterate
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 many areas and by sex in the previous year.
Overall
 it can be seen that the percentage of
female
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outnumbered
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 in the rate of illiterate in all 6 regions,
whereas
 women in South Asia had the lowest proportion of numerate in comparison to others.
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,
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people
 in developed countries were
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 to zero,
whereas
 South
Asian
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Asians
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 had the lowest proportion of numerate in comparison to others. With regard to 3 regions where the majority of people were uneducated, especially for
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. When it comes to South Asia,
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 and
male
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males
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 who were numerate had a
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 discrepancy, with about 65% and 33%
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respectively. It was followed by Arab Nations an The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the
last
 year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender,
last
 year Plan your a
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