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The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the following table provides information concerning the comparison of household expenses in Australia between 1991 and 2001. generally speaking, the average Australian family's monthly budget was increased from 675
dollars
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 per month at the beginning of the period to 715
dollars
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 per month
at the end
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 of the period. In detail, the budget allocation for clothing slightly declined from 30
dollars
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 to 20
dollars
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. The transport expenses
also
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 show a similar trend, it
is
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dropped from 70
dollars
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 to 45
dollars
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,
while
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 the spending on others is risen during the period. Regarding the data in the table, The food expenses in food, housing and other goods and services slightly increased
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 the allocation for electricity and water rocketed, from 75
dollars
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 in 1991 to 120
dollars
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 in 2001
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, the people of Australia mostly spend their budget on Food
as well as
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 Housing and the least on Clothing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • average family
  • significant changes
  • substantial increases
  • categories of expenditure
  • inflation
  • lifestyle changes
  • economic factors
  • cost of living
  • monthly expenditure
  • overall trend
  • comparisons
  • ten-year period
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