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Band 6+: The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Band 6+: The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of
employment
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 and
education
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rates
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in addition
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 to the average
income
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 in eight European
countries
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 in 2015 with additional age information.
Overall
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, in these eight
countries
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, the
employment
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rates
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 are not dramatically different from each other. The
income
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 statistics are related to both
employment
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 and
education
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rates
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. The highest
employment
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 rate was in Norway with 74.8% and
also
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 Norwegian people had the highest
income
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 with 41.483€. Another Scandinavian country Latvia, had 68% of employees
however
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 their
income
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 was one of the lowest with 5.828€. 66% of Luxembourg the
population
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 was working and their mean
income
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 was 34.320€. Bulgaria and Portugal had close
rates
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 of around 63.5% of employees, even though their
income
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 levels had slight differences they were still one of the lowest-
income
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countries
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 with 3.332€ and 8.435€.
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, half of the Greek
population
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 was working and their
income
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 was 7.520 on average.
On the other hand
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,
education
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rates
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 differed between
countries
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. In both Luxembourg, Norway and the UK around 40% of the
population
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 were studying in higher
education
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. Latvia, Austria and Greece had around 30% studying rate. Less than a quarter of the
population
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 study in Portugal.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, education, rates, income, countries, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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