The diagram below shows how avocado oil is extracted. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how avocado oil is extracted. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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analytic report provides information pertaining to the production of oil which is made by avocado extraction. In concise terms, it can be observed that the production of avocado oil is fairly complex and involves various stages.
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, the process commences with collecting fruits and culminates with manufacturing the final product which is ready to be used. The most logical point to start at is harvesting the berries before it is sorted in order to remove the rotten ones and keep the good quality of the products.
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step, the berry is washed by hand,
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crushed and blended so as to remove seeds and skins from a special machine. Once crushing and blending of the berry has been completed, the avocado mixture is passed through the centrifuge stage in the range of 45 and 50 Celsius degree, it is split to separate the solids and liquids
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separated into the grease and water whilst the wastewater
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removed. At the same time, the solid waste
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seeds, skins and rotten grain will be transported to the orchard which helps the plant grow faster.
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, the oil comes across the filter in order to be clarified before being bottled and ready for consumption.
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