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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The charts compare the layout of a university's
sports
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 center now, and how it will update after replacement.
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, there is not any demolition of the construction from the future plans. In the future, some constructions will be built, where outdoor courts are located at present. It can be seen that two outdoor courts and the main
hall
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 will connect with each other and
as a result
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, it will be an enormous
sports
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center
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centre
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. 8 constructions will be added by builders
instead
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 of two outdoor courts, namely a leisure pool, two changing rooms, a
sports
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 shop, a cafe, a
sports
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hall
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 and a pair of dance studios.  From the west side, there will be a pool, rest room and
sports
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 shop.
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, from the east side, there will be a
sports
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hall
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, a couple of dance studios and
also
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 a bathroom.
It is clear that
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 the builders will not demolish anything in the main
hall
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 during
this
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 period.
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introduction conclusion present
Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion. Start your essay with an overview and finish with a summary statement.
logical structure
Improve logical flow between paragraphs to ensure they connect well. Use more linking words and phrases.
supported main points
Develop the main points more comprehensively with additional details and examples to provide a fuller response.
complete response
The essay provides a clear description of the plans and captures the main changes.
relevant specific examples
Some relevant details and examples are included to help convey the changes in the layout.

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