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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The charts compare the layout of a university's
sports
 center now, and how it will update after replacement.
Overall
, there is not any demolition of the construction from the future plans. In the future, some constructions will be built, where outdoor courts are located at present. It can be seen that two outdoor courts and the main
hall
 will connect with each other and
as a result
, it will be an enormous
sports
center
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centre
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. 8 constructions will be added by builders
instead
 of two outdoor courts, namely a leisure pool, two changing rooms, a
sports
 shop, a cafe, a
sports
hall
 and a pair of dance studios.  From the west side, there will be a pool, rest room and
sports
 shop.
In contrast
, from the east side, there will be a
sports
hall
, a couple of dance studios and
also
 a bathroom.
It is clear that
 the builders will not demolish anything in the main
hall
 during
this
 period.
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The essay provides a clear description of the plans and captures the main changes.
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Some relevant details and examples are included to help convey the changes in the layout.

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