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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In some nations, it is noticeable that possessing a
house
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 is
crucial
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more crucial
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 than leasing one.
This
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 is because
that
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apply
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the
house
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owner
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 can consider it as an investment and renovate it as he wants. Personally, I believe owning a home is a negative situation and the subsequent paragraphs will elaborate more on that.
To begin
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 with, the reasons
attribute
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 to
this
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 are follows. The first primary reason is that the
owner
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 will consider the
house
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 as
long-term
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a long-term
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 investment
,
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apply
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 if
it
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apply
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is price
rise
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rises
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.
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Cost
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The cost
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 of buying a
house
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 in Amman,
for instance
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, was increasing more than three times
of
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its original
cost
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 twenty years ago. A second reason to add is that the
owner
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 can renovate and decorate it as he wants.
Finally
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, the
owner
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 will settle down in a particular area to be near his job. Personally, I believe that owning
home
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a home
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 is a negative situation for many factors.
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people can relocate more easily. To illustrate, renting is much cheaper than buying
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house
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a house
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 in
short
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the short
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 term. Renting
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house
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a house
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 in Irbid,
for example
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,
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cost
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costs
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 about 300 Jordanian Dinnar
while
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 owning
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house
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a house
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cost
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costs
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 more than 50000 Jordanian Dinnar.
Moreover
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, the landlord is responsible for maintenance
not
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 the tenant. In conclusion,
long term
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long-term
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 investment, renovating and decorating
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house
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a house
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 as the
owner
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 wants, and settling down near the job are the reasons why owning
home
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a home
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 is more vital than renting one. Relocating more easily, renting is cheaper than buying
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house
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a house
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 in
short
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the short
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 term and the responsibility for maintenance
are
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is
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 the justifications why I believe that owning
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house
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a house
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 is a negative situation

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task achievement
Make sure to structure your introduction clearly by briefly outlining the main points that will be discussed in the essay. This will improve the clarity and direction of your writing.
task achievement
Provide more detailed explanations and expand your ideas. Each reason should be fully developed to show depth of understanding.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph features a single clear idea with supporting examples. This will enhance the logical flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and linking words to improve the fluidity and connection between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay clearly addresses the prompt, discussing both why owning a home might be considered important and providing an opinion on whether this is a positive or negative situation.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present, contributing to a well-rounded essay structure.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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