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The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart above illustrates the different methods people utilised to access
news
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 in
years
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, 2013, 2015 and 2017 by
percentage
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. Television is the predominant source
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 the public used the most to access
news
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 in all 3
years
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 recorded,
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 for more than two third (66%), (71%) and (79%) of the
pupolation
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population
 respectively in
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the year
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year
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years
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 2015, 2017 and 2013, despite a slight decrease
percentage
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 over the
years
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.
Significant
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 decrease
of
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in
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 the
percentage
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 of users accessing
news
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 via newspaper was presented in the chart with drops of around 20% every 2
years
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 between 2013 and 2017. In 2017, only 21% of the recorded population accessed
news
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 via newspaper, half the
porportion
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proportion
 of the people using the same method in 2013 (42%). Internet was the
mean
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means
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 of
news
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 access with a stark increase in usage
percentage
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 with 69% of the people within the census
used
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using
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 the
internet
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Internet
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 to obtain
news
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 in 2017, more than
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double
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apply
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the
percentage
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 in 2013 at 31%. Trends for the population accessing
news
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 through radio remained stable between 2013 and 2017, with less than one-third recorded in all three
years
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 at 31%, 30% and 30% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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