You are invited to a party, however, because of some reasons you didn’t attend. Write a letter to the friend who invites you: (1) explain the reason why you didn’t go; (2) express your apology; (3) ask about some details in the party.

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Hello, Diana, I hope everything is all right, I write you because I want to let you know why I didn´t make it to your great party. As you know my kid was
frecuently
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frequently
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annoying
headache that makes him so vulnerable and that day he had the worst one, and I didn´t want to leave him alone. Please forgive me, I was eager to go and had a good time with you and our friends. Was Elisa there? Tell me if there was any odd or particular memorable fact in the party like the time when we used to go to the
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bar and we
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all night long and
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suddenly
one woman, Lina came from
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nowhere
and
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a beer all over us. Diana, sorry again and
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come over, we have to
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and chat about your nice event in my home, see you soon.
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coherence cohesion
Try breaking your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea. This will improve readability and help logically structure your response.
coherence cohesion
Pay a bit more attention to spelling and grammar. Words like 'frecuently' should be 'frequently', and 'suddenndly' should be 'suddenly'. Also, 'from nowere' should be 'from nowhere', and 'poar' should be 'pour'.
task achievement
The letter clearly explains the reason for not attending, expresses an apology, and asks for details about the party, covering all the required points.
task achievement
The tone is suitably friendly and conversational, appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and closing are well done, creating a friendly and polite atmosphere.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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