Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions?
It is a pressing issue that the
time
for a person
to look after themselves become
less because of busying take Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
care
for
an old Change preposition
of
person
is leading to a host of problems
that a person
need
to deal with in the future. The biggest Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
problems
are about health
and financial
but can be addressed by Replace the word
finances
take
the elderly to the retirement home and find Wrong verb form
taking
a
appropriate job.
The main problem is that the Change the article
an
person
who take
Change the verb form
takes
cares
of the elderly will have Fix the agreement mistake
care
health
problems
. In other words
, having time
and spending that time
to take care
of the elderly is difficult due to
the busy hours people
spend in workplaces. Consequently
, people
who spend their time
at the workplace, do
chores, Wrong verb form
doing
looking
after their kids and the elderly will have no Correct word choice
and looking
time
to care
about
themselves. Change preposition
for
Thus
, the health
of that person
will alleviate
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be alleviated
by
Change preposition
over
time
.
Another negative aspect of taking care
of the aged, financial condition
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conditions
plays
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play
an
crucial role Change the article
a
on
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in
people
awareness. In recent years, the high rate of unemployment and higher living Change noun form
people's
cost
are disadvantages for the citizens to pay for Fix the agreement mistake
costs
health
insurance which means that adults cannot afford the
healthcare services and medicines. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, the elderly are neglected and people
who take care
of them do not have enough money to pay for medicines and other things around them such
as food, water and electricity bills. Therefore
, individuals need to solve this
Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
problems
as soon as possible.
Perhaps the solutions
to the Fix the agreement mistake
solution
problems
of health
and financial
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finances
is
taking the elderly Change the verb form
are
people
to a retirement home, there will be nurses and carersto
look after them and find a suitable job that can arrange the perfect Correct your spelling
carers to
carers
time
to have time
to take care
for
the elderly at home. Change preposition
of
Moreover
, the matures not only do for
a living but Correct pronoun usage
it for
also
visit the senior citizens in their spare time
. Therefore
, this
policy enhance
the Change the verb form
enhances
health
of individuals and ensure
the financial.
Correct subject-verb agreement
ensures
Thus
, it can be seen that health
and financial
are the relevant Replace the word
finances
problems
. Therefore
, it should have been demonstrated that the matures need to find a
appropriate job and Change the article
an
taking
the elderly to retirement homes.Wrong verb form
take
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introduction conclusion present
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supported main points
Main points related to health and financial issues are sufficiently supported.
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