The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the proportion of healthcare expenses of gross domestic products in certain countries of Europe in
three
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respective
years
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2002, 2007 and 2012.
Overall
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, Switzerland was the
highest paid
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country
on
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in
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medical
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medicine
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in all
three
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years
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while
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The
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apply
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France shared the same percentage in 2007.
Additionally
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, Belgium stood second on the chart.
However
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, Estonia
was
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spent the least amount of money on well-being. It is clear from the chart that, Switzerland
was allocating
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approximately 11% of
money
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the money
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on
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to
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the heath
a heath
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heath
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health
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in all
three
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years
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.
Whereas
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, Belgium, Denmark, France,
Netherland
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Netherlands
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and Norway shared the same ratio. Belgium recorded
same
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the same
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amount 10% in all
three
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years
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. Denmark
10
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had 10
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% in 2012
while
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in the previous
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years
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years,
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it was under 10%. France 10% in 2002 which escalated by approximately 11% in 2007 and
drooped
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dropped
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to under 10% in 2012. Norway
together with
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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showed
same
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the same
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percentile in medical expenditure 10% in 2012 and 2002 respectively, Meanwhile,
Netherland
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Netherlands
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gradually
decrease
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decreased
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in
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apply
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health expenses
9
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by 9
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% in 2007 and
further
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decline
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declined
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to 8% in 2012.
In
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Spain, Slovenia, and Luxembourg have
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a descent
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descent
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decent
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amount of contribution as 8% . In compression, Slovenia surged to 10% in 2012
while
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Luxembourg fell to under 8% around 7%. Lithuania and Poland had
same
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the same
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ratio
6
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of 6
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% in 2012 and in 2002 or 2007.
Although
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Lithuania was at 5% in former
years
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and Poland rose to 9% in the later year. Estonia has the lowest budget on people's well-being 3% only in all
three
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years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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