The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The data illustrates the distribution of male and female
workers
categorised by three different sectors: Services,
Agriculture
and
Industry
in
country
A and
country
B
.
Overall
, most males and
females
in
both
countries
work
in Services. For
country
A, the second most occupied business sector for
both
gender
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is
Agriculture
,
while
an insignificant minority of
workers
from
both
genders
works
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work
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in
Agriculture
observed in
B
. In
country
A,
Service
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the Service
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industry
contributes the highest
numbers
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number
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of
workers
, recorded
at
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over half of male
workers
and almost half of
females
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the females
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join
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the said
labor
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labour
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force. The same trend is observed in
country
B
, with 65% of male
workers
and a majority of female
workers
choose
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choosing
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to
work
there.
Moreover
, A shows the least
numbers
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number
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of
workers
joing
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in
Industry
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the Industry
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regardless of
genders
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gender
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, with 15
percent
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per cent
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of males and 8% of
females
. The data is slightly different for
B
, as a third of men
work
in
Industry
, and the number is three
time
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times
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larger than the number of women in the same
industry
, making it the second most popular job segment in
B
. The
numbers
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number
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of people
work
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working
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in
Agriculture
differs significantly from
country
A to
country
B
, as the
numbers
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number
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of
workers
compose the said workforce marked the second highest for
both
genders in A, with 43% of
females
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female
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workers
and a third of
males worker
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male workers
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work
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working
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there;
whereas
in
country
B
, almost no people choose to do agricultural job.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, agriculture, industry, country, b, females, both, work, numbers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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