The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictogram here illustrates how

sugar

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is made from

sugar

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cane

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through 7 steps, those are growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporation, centrifugal, drying and cooling.

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, the whole process can be

devided

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divided

into two sections,

firstly

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from

sugar

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cane

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juice

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secondly

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and secondly

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from

juice

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sugar

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. The process begins with the farming of

sugar

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cane

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in the field. It takes 12-18 months for

sugar

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cane

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to be prepared for harvesting. After that time

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it is harvested, either by manual labour or by industrial extractor.

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it is put into

crusher

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a crusher

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after cleaning and trimming. From

crusher

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the crusher

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juice

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the juice

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is extracted in a collection pot. The liquid

juice

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then

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run through a limestone filter in order to purify it, which

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then

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put in a

boilar

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boiler

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in high temperature in order to transform it into syrup. The syrup goes to a centrifugal chamber where it is separated from

sugar

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crystals. The

sugar

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crystals are collected for drying and cooling in a pot. The dried and cooled crystals are

finally

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ready to be used as

sugar

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

manufacturing process
sugar cane
harvesting
transporting
factory
crushing
extracting
juice
filtering
impurities
heating
evaporating
syrup
boiling
crystallizing
sugar
separating
drying
packaging
distribution
stage
process

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You are visiting a town where you once worked. Write to a friend you worked with there. Include the following in your letter: •Tell your friend about your life now. •Give him/her details of your visit. •Arrange how you can meet.

Improvements in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and giver your own opinion.