The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictogram here illustrates how
sugar
is made from sugar
cane
through 7 steps, those are growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporation, centrifugal, drying and cooling. Overall
, the whole process can be devided
into two sections, Correct your spelling
divided
firstly
from sugar
cane
to juice
, secondly
from Correct word choice
and secondly
juice
to sugar
.
The process begins with the farming of sugar
cane
in the field. It takes 12-18 months for sugar
cane
to be prepared for harvesting. After that time period
it is harvested, either by manual labour or by industrial extractor. Add a comma
period,
Then
it is put into crusher
after cleaning and trimming. From Add an article
a crusher
crusher
, Add an article
the crusher
juice
is extracted in a collection pot.
The liquid Add an article
the juice
juice
is then
run through a limestone filter in order to purify it, which then
put in a Add a missing verb
is then
boilar
in high temperature in order to transform it into syrup. The syrup goes to a centrifugal chamber where it is separated from Correct your spelling
boiler
boil
sugar
crystals. The sugar
crystals are collected for drying and cooling in a pot. The dried and cooled crystals are finally
ready to be used as sugar
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