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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fueld in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fueld in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The quantity of
petroleum
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,coal and natural
gases
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 prepared in the UK during the two decades from 1981 to 2000 are compared by the line graph. The amounts are denoted in energy
units
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, where a single unit stands for the sum produced by a million tonnes of crude.
Overall
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,
while
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 the demand for natural
gases
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 showed progress with time, that of coal witnessed a decline. Even though the usage of
petroleum
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 had some fluctuations it remained still within the duration.
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, when
petroleum
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 production is considered, it was the most popular fuel in each year, which was 90
units
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 in 1981. Particularly it had a rapid increase during the first three years, reaching the peak value of 140
units
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 which kept constant up to 1987.
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 the
petroleum
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 formation rate had a gradual dip till 1992 it was raised back to its apex value.
On the other hand
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, coal was the second largest power producer at the beginning which started at 80
units
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.
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,
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 constant capacity experienced a significant plunge by 50% lower than the initial amount within a year and
then
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 had a sudden progress up to 60
units
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 in the consecutive year.
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, since 1986, coal utilization has declined slightly which reported its minimal figure in 2000 which was about 30
units
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. Mean the manufacturing of natural
gases
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 which was the least common power tool was stabilized for the starting decade.
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 the next decade, it gradually raised the value of it, by 60
units
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 to the former data of 40
units
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 and
at the end
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 of 2000 natural
gases
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 became the second most common power generator.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gases, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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