The diagram below shows how salt is removed from seawater to make it drinkable. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how salt is removed from seawater to make it drinkable. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figures illustrate the process of how salt and contaminants are separated from
seawater
and how to make fresh and drinkable
water
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are three main stages and it starts with draining
seawater
into the system and ends with distributing clean
water
.
To begin
with,
seawater
will be drained by a pipe into the pre-treatment filter
and
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in
this
stage, there are two ways
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one of them is to filter backwash back to the sea
while
the other one will pass the salted
water
to the next stage.
Furthermore
, in the second chamber, the sea
water
is forced through
membrane
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by using high pressure which in in turn both impurity substances and salt will be segregated and only pure
water
molecules get through these tiny holes. What is interesting to note is that those residues so-called '
seawater
concentrate' will be combined with the filter backwash from the previous stage and back to the sea.
Additionally
, in the next procedure, the
water
will be cleansed by lime, chlorine and fluoride,
as a result
, the clean and fresh
water
is stored in a gigantic rectangular-shaped storage before integrating a
water
supply system.
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