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The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates information about the number of passengers who took the seven different popular
airline
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airlines
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 in the US in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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all of the seven most famous
airline
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airlines
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 were substantially
devloped
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developed
 during 10 years.
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 the data, the Delta, the American, the Alaska, the Hawaiin
airlines
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'
growh
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growth
 rates increase over 100%.
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, it is notable that
the
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JetBlue Airways experienced a dramatic
rose
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 at 249% compared to the past, even though
this
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 airport
was
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recorded the lowest number of passengers in 1995. Looking more
closley
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closely
, the American, Alaska and Hawaiin
Airlines
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were
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ranged from 10 million and 15 million. After 10 years, these three
airlines
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 were recorded more than two times in the number of
patron
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patrons
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, which is only the American
Airlines
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inceased
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increased
 over 30 million.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words airlines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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