The diagram below shows the stages in processing cocoa beans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the three steps of precessing from
cocoa
beans
to cocoa
products which made
for customers and businesses.
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are made
Overall
, it is clear that
the process needs two types of working methods which are the
human activity and Correct article usage
apply
the
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machinary
activity.
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machinery
Firstly
, employees pick the natural beans
from cocoa
trees into the shells and drying
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dry
which
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them
these
activities structure Correct determiner usage
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the
stage 1. In stage 2 where the cocoas' Correct article usage
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using
can Replace the word
use
defferent
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differ
according to
the process of pressing. If the cocoa
beans
which
are pressed more than others become Correct pronoun usage
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cocoa
cake which can different products
with how much they Fix the agreement mistake
product
grinding
. Wrong verb form
are ground
This
process produces the cocoa
powders going to consumer
and the Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
cocoa
liquors going to industry.
On the other hand
, if cocoa
beans
are refined further
and mixed with sugar, they become industrial chocolates. These are touched in final
processing and finished Add an article
the final
to
chocolate products Change preposition
into
what
we can see in supermarkets.Correct pronoun usage
which
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cocoa, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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