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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Artificial Intelligence is already dominating almost all fields around the world.
Driverless
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vehicles
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 would be one of the aspects of technological advancements, which we could see in
near
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 future, and these
vehicles
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 would be responsible
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people
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 who are travelling from one place to another. In my opinion,
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 would be more than
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 that I will discuss in my essay. The first and foremost benefit of
driverless
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 cars would be less number of
accidents
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. We have seen that in many countries the percentage of
accidents
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are
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 increasing
everyday
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, and
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 leads to major injuries and an increased mortality rate.
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, automated
vehicles
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 would be perfect
in
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 driving as there would not be any chance of drink and
drive
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 or any kind of
neglegence
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negligence
 that would lead to deadly
accidents
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, in
China
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this
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 trend has already
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started, and there are so many metro trains which are
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.
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,
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 would
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 result in lower crime rates and more safety. There are so many cases in various countries where taxi or
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 drivers take advantage of passengers and indulge in crimes like stealing, robbery, and
infact
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in fact
rapes
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.
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, in India in 2012, there was a case called Nirbhaya
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in
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 a
bus
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 where the
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 driver raped
a women
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a woman
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 to death because she was alone
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 the
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, if we talk about
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the drawbacks
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 of
driverless
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vehicles
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 the main problem would be
an
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increased unemployment. When all
vehicles
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 would drive from one place to another
own
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 their own
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 they would be fully automated, which clearly shows that there would be no need
of
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people
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 to drive them.
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, many
people
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 are employed as
bus
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, train, and taxi drivers which assist
people
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 to commute, and
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 way, they are earning money for survival. Unemployment would eventually lead to less consumerism and less economic growth. In conclusion,
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driverless
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 cars have negatives like underemployment, I am still convinced that fewer
accidents
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 and lower crime rates have more
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 than drawbacks.
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task achievement
Your essay provides a balanced view with a clear opinion. However, some ideas could be more thoroughly explored. Consider expanding on the disadvantages and providing more specific predictions or evidence that backs up your points.
coherence cohesion
While the essay is well-structured, some transitions between paragraphs could be smoother. Make sure to clearly link your points and ensure a logical progression from one idea to the next.
introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a strong introduction and conclusion which help in clearly stating and summarizing your position.
relevant specific examples
You have used relevant and specific examples to support your main points, which adds credibility to your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous
  • driverless
  • human error
  • congestion
  • mobility
  • independence
  • energy-efficient
  • pollution
  • fossil fuel
  • economic impact
  • infrastructure
  • maintenance
  • insurance
  • psychological benefits
  • hacking
  • data privacy
  • ethical programming
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