The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures illustrate changes in Neighborhood areas of Main
Street
and Oak Street
in particular
of time
period. Add an article
the time
a time
Overall
, Oak Street
houses and main roads stayed the same whilst book store, shoe store and lake were replaced with other facilities.
Turning into more details, the buildings in
the left side of Oak Change preposition
on
street
road did not change Capitalize word
Street
while
in the rigth
part of the Correct your spelling
right
street
the Add a comma
street,
quantity
of homes decreased doubled (from 4 to 2). Change the quantifier
number
Moreover
, instead
of destroyed objects the
car parking Correct article usage
apply
was appeared
after that.
Change to the active voice
appeared
has appeared
Futhermore
, book and shoe shops were smashed and Correct your spelling
Furthermore
woods
were removed in order to build a big shopping mall in that area. Green Correct article usage
the woods
surrounding
with ordinary Fix the agreement mistake
surroundings
park
and Fix the agreement mistake
parks
an enough
big Lake were reconstructed into Rephrase
a
Parking
Lot with plenty of private Correct article usage
a Parking
vechiles
.Correct your spelling
vehicles
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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