The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures illustrate changes in Neighborhood areas of Main
Street
and Oak
Street
in particular
of
time
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the time
a time
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period.
Overall
, Oak
Street
houses and main roads stayed the same whilst book store, shoe store and lake were replaced with other facilities. Turning into more details, the buildings
in
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on
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the left side of Oak
street
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Street
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road did not change
while
in the
rigth
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right
part of the
street
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street,
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the
quantity
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number
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of homes decreased doubled (from 4 to 2).
Moreover
,
instead
of destroyed objects
the
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apply
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car parking
was appeared
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appeared
has appeared
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after that.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, book and shoe shops were smashed and
woods
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the woods
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were removed in order to build a big shopping mall in that area. Green
surrounding
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surroundings
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with ordinary
park
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parks
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and
an enough
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a
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big Lake were reconstructed into
Parking
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a Parking
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Lot with plenty of private
vechiles
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vehicles
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words street with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic flow
  • Land use
  • Residential buildings
  • Commercial activities
  • Local businesses
  • Retail stores
  • Local economy
  • Employment
  • Community facilities
  • Displaced
  • Construction
  • Green spaces
  • Pollution
  • Noise
  • Environmental impact
  • Neighborhood dynamics
  • Transformation
  • Redevelopment
  • Infrastructure
  • Urbanization
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