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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides the rate of university graduates in
Canda
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Canada
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 between 1992 and 2007.
Overall
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, the graph
is illustrated
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illustrates
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 the trend of adults in
Canad
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Canada
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 over
a
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apply
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fifteen years from 1992 and 2007 it
is
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can be seen that
the
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apply
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women hit
the
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a
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 peak in
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last
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the last
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 period in the graph
while
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 in the years 1998 was the lowest
number
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 of graduates in
Canad
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Canada
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. First of all ,
the
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in the
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 first three years from 1992 to 1996 the
number
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 of women
graduatesd
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graduates
graduated
was
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apply
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increased gradually to reach approximately 105,000
then
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 decreased slightly to reach 100,000 from the
end
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1996
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of 1996
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 till 2000 after that the
number
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 of females
graduated
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who graduated
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growing
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grew
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 dramatically to reach to top
number
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 in 2006 it was that
nuder
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under
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 150,000 graduated . On the
onther
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other
 hand , the trend of men graduated was rose between 1982 to the
end
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 of 1994
subsequently
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 the rate was downward moderate to
reached
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reach
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the
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a
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 lower
number
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 in 1998 and from the
end
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 of 1998 to the beginning was like wave
likewise
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 in the
last
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 three the blue line was
improment
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improvement
 quickly to reached the highest
number
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in
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at
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 the
end
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 of 2006 it was that just around nuder 100,000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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