The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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pie graphs provide data on the proportion of men and women employees
among
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three different sectors, namely
service
, agriculture,and industry, in countries A and B.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the main work type is
service
in both nations. It is
also
worth pointing out that
workers
in
country
B barely work in agriculture part. Looking at the
country
A pie chart in more detail,
service
is the biggest portion in both gender
workers
in
country
A at 56% and 49% respectively. The percentage of male employees in agriculture showed just under a
third,
while
the figure for women accounted for
at
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49% and it does not show a big difference from
service
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sector. When it comes to
the
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country
B, the proportion of
service
workers
, regardless of gender, had
the
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similar trend
that
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compared with the figure for
country
A
workers
, at 88% in women and 65% in men respectively.
However
, the farming
workers
experienced merely 3% in males and 1% in females.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, workers, country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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