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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
Canadian
 universities' graduate numbers between 1992 and 2007.
Overall
, there has been a higher interest, in general, regarding attending and graduating college from the
Canadian
 females. On the one hand, the number of
Canadian
 males graduating
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universtity
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university
 in 1992 was only 70,000. After, it rose gradually until 1995 which
estimated
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 back
then
 by under 80,000
graduates
.
Then
, started to fall slightly again until 1998 which had almost the same number of
graduates
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in
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 1992. Anyhow, some fluctuations
was
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 noticeable in the numbers before 2001. Ultimately,
a significant increases
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a significant increase
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 started to take place as the number of
graduates
 from the
Canadian
 college was over 95,000 males by the end of 2007.
On the other hand
,
Canadian
 females graduating
universtity
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university
 in 1992 was slightly less than 100,000
graduates
. After,
a slight increases
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a slight increase
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witnessed
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 until 1995, which
estimated
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 back
then
 by almost 105,000
graduates
 and started to fall slightly again until 1999.
Then
, a skyrocketing trend was dominating the numbers of the graduating college girls which was demonstrated with over 145,000 females by the end of 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canadian, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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