The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 203 and 2040.
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of
the
citizens who lived in cities in different Asian nations between 1970 and 2020 and the predictions from 2030 to 2040.
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Overall
, it can be seen that the residents in Malaysia and Indonesia had merely changed all over the timeframe, whereas
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, as well as Thailand,
as well as
Thailand
saw an increase but not much like the others. In addition
, it should also
be noted how Indonesia exceeded Thailand
and Philippines
, becoming the country which the citizens rate Correct article usage
the Philippines
in
rank 2 in the line graph.
Regarding the 2 countries which had a big difference. About Malaysia, it began with 30% in 1970 and Change preposition
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then
rose gradually from 30% to 45% in 1990. Furthermore
, it increased dramatically between 1990 and 2040, reaching approximately 84% at the end
of the period, making it the top
country which had the highest citizens of the four. Correct word choice
apply
Likewise
, Indonesia was the lowest country, however
, it rose slightly from 13% to 26% between 1970 and 2000, then
it grew Correct word choice
and then
up
considerably, Change preposition
apply
exceeded
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exceeding
Thailand
and Philippines
by 2000 and 2010, respectively. In 2010, it continued increasing sharply, ending with more than 60%.
Taking a look at the other countries, the population who lived in cities in Correct article usage
the Philippines
Philippines
increased gradually from 1970 to 1990, reaching a peak Correct article usage
the Philippines
with
nearly 50% and Change preposition
of
then
dropped significantly in 2010, got nearly 55% at the end
of the timeframe. Meanwhile, about
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in
Thailand
, it rose sharply between 19% and 28% from 1970 to 1990. By 1990, it fluctuated to 2020 then
suddenly increased, ending with
50%.Change preposition
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